Place and Time Respons

The two papers I looked at were Grant and Gabby's.

Grant is still deciding if he would like to write it in a series of vignettes, or make it into a short story. The paper could easily go both ways. He had a lot of really good description, however, could use a little more dialogue to divide it up. Gabby's paper was really well written, and had a lot of of good inner dialogue. The only thing I wasn't sure if she needed fixing was the format of some of her dialogue.

I feel like my paper does a good job at incorporating everything. It just needs some "fine tuning."